I’m continuing with These Haunted Hills even though the work on it has been very slow (as I’ve been working on edits for a vampire thing which I might start sharing again as I really need fresh eyes on it).
Brendan is bisexual which will be known by the second chapter. I’m using Tom Mison (from Sleepy Hollow) as body/face inspiration for Brendan though I’m not sure yet if his hair is shorter or longer.
This takes place directly after last week’s snippet and I ran over 2 sentences so the thought is completed (as a reminder, Brendan has come to the Hocking Hills and is renting a cabin for a month).
He peered out one rain streaked window. All he could see were trees, mostly pines with something that was covered in blooms, dogwood maybe. The green isolation he’d chased after surrounded him. Those second thoughts skyrocketed. Kristen hadn’t wanted him to come. She didn’t trust him alone. Brendan knew his ex had reason to worry. Both of them were mired in grief and three years hadn’t moved them past it.
If you’d like to play along, Rainbow Snippets is a Facebook community where we post up 6 sentences of one of our LGBT stories every Saturday. It’s been fun and you can find it here. Be sure to check out all the offers! It’s been a great supportive group!
Jana Denardo 
Aw, it went from peaceful to sad. Poor Brendan. 😦
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Thanks. Brendan is technically borderline suicidal at this point.
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Lovely on the outside, so sad on inside!
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That is an excellent description of Brendan.
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Wow, didn’t see that coming at the beginning. Nice descriptions, if sad. Makes me want to hug him.
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Vivid description leading into interesting character development!
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Thanks so much.
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Yeah, I’m thinking isolation + grief = not so healthy.
I saw Tom Mison at ComicCon, a year or so back, btw. An engaging speaker but a lot shorter than I was expecting! 😉
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Cool, I’d like to meet him. Is he really short then? Ah well, that’s okay.
Isolation + grief has his ex (who is still good friends with him) very worried.
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Love this line: “The green isolation he’d chased after surrounded him.” The whole snippet is great. Tells us quite a lot in so few words.
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Thanks so much. I’m glad you think so.
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Great description with lots of emotion and a lovely taste of back story.
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Thanks so much.
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I’m looking forward to this. The location sounds gorgeous, even though it’s making him anxious at the moment. Given the title, I’m guessing he has more to worry about in the future!
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Thanks Louise. I need to get moving since I’m still only on ch 1. The location is (if you want to Google it, it’s Hocking Hills in Ohio) And yes he’ll have plenty to worry about.
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Lovely snippet. That change in mood was subtle and beautiful
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Thanks so much. I’m glad that worked.
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One sentence and it changes to intriguing. Nice.
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Thanks so much
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Lovely description with a subtle change to something sad. Looking forward to more.
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Thank you.
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