Rainbow Snippets

I know I still owe some comments from last week and probably will be slow this week too. Editing a fairly long novel will suck up time like you can’t believe (also it’s been a terrible week at work and I felt too snarky to be allowed in public commenting on things)

Still working from These Haunted Hills. When last we saw them Josh and Brendan have been shut up in a hotel room with a ghost who’s tossing debris about. Josh is by the stuck door and Josh is across the room (to make the action clearer here since it’s lacking context>

The board rattled on the floor as it were ready to launch again. Joshua beckoned Brendan closer. Brendan had no intention of letting anything get between him and the door until Joshua pointed at the glass-less window. Brendan jogged across the room, paying no heed to the sponginess of the boards. Josh went out the window first, holding up a hand to halt Brendan. He stomped around the window with his boots, mushing down the glass.

“Okay, don’t see any snakes. Need a hand.”

Was there a hopeful tone in that question? Brendan dismissed it, handing Josh the camera before levering himself out the window into the over growth around the building.

If you’d like to play along, Rainbow Snippets is a Facebook community where we post up 6 sentences of one of our LGBT stories every Saturday. It’s been fun and you can find it here. Be sure to check out all the offers! It’s been a great supportive group!

24 thoughts on “Rainbow Snippets”

  1. Love the interweaving of description with action here. Spongy floor… yikes.

    And I fully understand the running behind. I’m in the midst of an editing job so I pretty much didn’t get anything else done last week. This week, however, I am trying to visit the Snippets early so I don’t miss the good stuff.

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